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Department of Redundancy Department and Other Skill Typos

On the skills page, under Tinkering V, there is this sentence:

"You can also craft fancy tools like Saucepans, Scrapers, Saucepans, and Awesome Pots."

Saucepans are listed twice :O

Posted 2 years ago by Edward Subscriber! | Permalink

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  • they're just that important :D
    Posted 2 years ago by Bunyip Subscriber! | Permalink
  • Also, under Blending II is

    "it makes the operation of the Blending much less taxing."

    Surely you mean

    "it makes the operation of the BlendER much less taxing."


    Edit: now you've really got me going again. Under Master Chef I:

    "you will whipping up some recipes with the Awesome Pot forthwith."

    there is a verb missing. It should be

    "you will BE whipping up some recipes with the Awesome Pot forthwith.


    Under Element Handling:

    "handle all the Elements you'd want."

    "you'd want" is in the conditional tense. It should be in the present

    "handle all the Elements YOU want."


    Under Refining I:

    "Those elements will come in handy."

    When will they come in handy? How about

    "Those elements will come in handy LATER."


    Under Refining II:

    "Upgrade your own self"

    should be

    "Upgrade YOURSELF"

    "a 50% increase in the speed"

    this is somewhat ambiguous. How about

    "a 50% DECREASE in the TIME"


    Under Meditative Arts I:

    "Allows use"

    What does? This sentence needs a subject

    "IT allows use"


    Under Meditative Arts II:

    "And, it also bumps up"

    The word "And" is a bit superfluous. How about

    "IT also bumps up"


    Under Levitation I:

    "Focusing Orb" is in bold. This is the only skill where an object is in bold. It should be consistent


    Under Transcendental Radiation:

    The first two sentences don't make sense. The triteness makes them difficult to read


    Under Animal Kinship I:

    "you will no longer fail the basic animal interactions"

    This sentence seems to be in direct contrast to the later sentence that things are more efficient. Is it impossible or just inefficient to do these interactions without the skill? If it is impossible, how about

    "you will no longer fail TO COMPLETE basic animal interactions"


    Under Animal Kinship II:

    "introduces some..., increases the amount of meat... and the amount of milk"

    The list should be all verbs or all nouns

    "introduces some... AND increases the amount of meat... and milk"


    Under Animal Kinship III:

    "a chance of a large meat and milk bonuses."

    "a large bonuses" is not correct. The 'a' should be eliminated

    "a chance of large meat and milk bonuses."


    Animal Kinship VI:

    This thing makes me want to cry. "Rarified" should be spelled "Rarefied." The tone shifts back and forth and the grammar is funky. How about

    "This rarEfied skill gives a kinship so close that pigs do not require petting before nibbling and butterflies DO NOT REQUIRE massaging before milking. Additionally, Rewards and bonus are all notched up."


    I will comment on the remaining skills (Gardening section, BL, T, and Teleport) later
    Posted 2 years ago by Edward Subscriber! | Permalink
  • hahaha, this is brilliant ;)
    kinda thought you ment it at first ... :p
    Posted 2 years ago by Slokda Subscriber! | Permalink